Fanfiction Revenge- Final Copy

 Cold. A feeling Emily Thorne was all too familiar with. As she lay on her couch, she could see the moons reflection on the back wall, her breathing becoming more and more heavy as the cold air brushed through the curtains and stroked gently up her arms. Her quest for revenge left her with no fear of living on her own, and being alone drove her vengeance for her father’s death even more.

She got up and bent down to the floorboard, the plank of wood squeaking open as Emily pushed hard on it. She decided to remind herself of why she was back in her old home. She picked up the box of secrets her father left her; it’s contents were the stories that had paved her road to revenge. One by one she brought out the photos, ornaments, and jewelry and letters her father had left for her. Her families secrets exposed on the coffee table as she planned her next attack.

It was late, the time on the lounge clock ticking slowly to 11 o’clock; Emily lay back on the couch hoping that Daniel would appear at the front door. As she slipped slowly into the couch and relaxed, the silence of her house brought her peace as her eyes slowly closed, she drifted into a deep sleep.

Her heart skipped a beat; Emily was awoken by the sound of a gruff male voice penetrating her ears.

The sound of sirens whirled around her like a tornado of chaos, and at that moment Emily was scared. She had lost control of the situation; her fear was the only emotion that she had tried to avoid at all costs because she knew that her fear would have exposed her and that everything she had actioned would be for nothing. The noise around her became louder as she tried to resist the strain the police officer was holding on her, and at that moment above all the chaos she heard the echo of a voice. A voice that was familiar, the reason why her hatred existed and why she had become determined to destroy many lives.   

“Did you really think I wouldn’t know? Victoria asked

“How foolish of you Emily! Or should I say Amanda? You’re going right where your father went” Victoria’s cold voice rang in Emily’s ears.

Emily froze as time stood still. Her body struggling, pushing, shoving, and trying to escape the grasp of the FBI agents; their arms firmly locked around all parts of her body making it impossible for her to escape .Her body struggled as she became mentally obsolete. Her thoughts had become a blur in her mind as Emily looked Victoria. Her eyes piercing with anger, and the revenge that was burning inside her, all she thought about was hoe she could ultimately bring Victoria down.

Emily’s body was shoved into the back of the police car. Her arms handcuffed behind her back. The feeling of fear had enclosed her; the feeling of the unknown was the worst Emily could feel. She stared out into the night sky; the stars following as the car steadily drove toward the police station. The journey took all of twenty minutes but time felt like it had stood still.

Upon arrival at the Hamptons police station, Victoria instructed the policeman to leave Emily in the car while she stood at the entrance of the station signaling the driver to come out.

“She's Amanda Clarke and while I believe she knows everything about me, there is something she doesn’t know, she will use it against me, something Conrad doesn’t know and if Emily were to find out it WILL destroy me!”

Emily could see the look on Victoria’s face. It brought her comfort knowing that it wasn’t over. Even the slightest disadvantage meant that there was still an opportunity to prove her fathers innocence.

The moonlight reflected off the glass of the police car, the wait gave Emily the opportunity to gather herself. She wiped the tears from her eyes, tears she didn’t know she had shed. She pulled herself together, the smirk forming upon her face. Perception was everything to Emily and she knew that if everything looked fine on the outside she could regain control of the situation.

“Out, and walk this way!” the police officer commanded.

Her arms grabbed from behind as she was escorted into the police station. The humming of the bright fluorescent light were all she could hear as she was guided down a long corridor.

“The room at the end, that’s where she wants her” the voice groaned.

Emily could not hear anymore. She had closed off any voice apart from her own. She knew what was in the room before she got there. She knew what was happening and she knew what she was going to say.


Nothing.

“Sit Amanda” Victoria instructed.

“Will there be any else Mrs. Grayson? Would you like us to wait?” The detective asked

“No, I will be fine, I can handle it from here” Victoria answered

Emily sat upright, her body calm as she sat with silence. She could sense that even though Victoria knew everything about her, there was something she wasn’t telling her. Something Emily knew would give her the advantage to use against Victoria.

Victoria circled around Emily, the sound of her breath giving way to the air.

“I am not the fool you take me for Amanda… A fool for once falling in love with your father, but that was the past, a past I am not willing to relive at any cost! I don’t expect you to say anything but I know that anything you do or say will not hold any ground with anyone, especially Daniel”

Victoria’s voice echoed through Emily’s mind as Emily tried to remember everything that had happened in the last two months. Everything she had done to bring the Grayson’s down. Everything she knew she could use for revenge against Victoria.

Nothing.

Was this the end?

Emily glared at Victoria. Her thoughts racing through her head. She wanted to scream, yell in fact but she knew at her most vulnerable of times it was best not to say anything. The temptation grew as Victoria's voice continued to drill through Emily’s mind.

“Now the whole world will know about you Amanda, your father was a fraud and like him you will be destroyed. Like father like daughter.

Emily burst out in rage and stood up to Victoria, their eyes met with rage as she screamed

“You know nothing Victoria! I will destroy you, all of you, and you will be nothing! The Grayson name will fall just like my father did!”

“Emily! Emily! Wake up,” screamed a familiar voice.

It was Daniel. His face looked upon in horror as he sat on the couch next to Emily.

“What are you doing here? Wait How did you get in?” Emily asked.

“The back door, Are you ok? You were screaming I will destroy you Victoria”.

Daniel answered as he picked up a photo that was lying on the coffee table.

“This is the man my mother was fighting about with my father, they fought about him all the time when I was a kid, and this is David Clarke”

“Who is the little girl in the photo with him?” he asked

Emily froze. Nothing.

Pineapple Express Fanfic Final

Prince of WEED

The sun just peaks itself over the horizon setting the crystal clear waters and white beaches alight with a haze of orange, while a skinny Jamaican male (who looks surprisingly like Bob Marley) sits on the trunk of a palm tree, with nothing but a pair of black jeans on. He is too busy rolling up a joint to notice a heavy set six foot four black guy approaching him. He turns to face to man…

“What is it Etan” he asks in a heavy Jamaican accent

Bowing he replies “your shipment from Cuba has arrived Prince Bob Narley, or should I say king since you’re being crowned today” he says playfully, though straitens quickly as he gets no response to his joke “the shipment is being moved into your private chambers as we speak sir” returning to his original serious tone.

“Good come sit down and chill with me” having finished rolling while Etan was talking he now held it to his lips lit it and inhaled.

“Of course sir” taking his place beside him on the trunk they pass the joint between each other until the joint was gone and their day had gotten off to the perfect start.

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Now in his room after eating breakfast Bob opens the door to his secret stash to look over his newly purchased ‘merchandise’ though stopping before entering the room, seeing a picture of his old American friends back when they used to live with him in Kingston. “Saul and Red I wonder what those two are up to?” he thinks to himself quickly reminiscing in good memories. He then continues on his business entering his secret stash when he feels a tug on his leg, looking down he has just enough time to see a thin wire pulled taunt against his jeans, while connected to a grenade.

“FUCK!!!”  He screams while diving and trying to shut the door at the same time.

He lands flat on his face and stomach while the door is blasted back open with the spray of shrapnel and splinters of wood fly everywhere over his exposed back. Dusting himself off and pulling bits of wood from his dreads and obviously a little rattled Etan bursts through the door sprinting as fast as any legs would be able to carry his massive frame.

“Holly FUCK! Are you OK?” rushing to Bob side and helping him away from the wreckage

“Yeh man, what the fuck was that about?”

“Your uncle Shaggy has framed you for the murder of the your father the King of Jamaica! And is now trying to kill you off!” helping Bob to his bed he starts grabbing cloths from his draws and closet and begins packing them in a suitcase. “You need to get away from Jamaica or you’re as good as dead” chucking Bob a blue long-sleeved shirt he zips up the suitcase “put that on and some shoes we’re going to the airport”

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Bob still a bit dazed did as he was told and left without thinking too much of it, only until he got to the airport did he realise…

“HOLLY FUCK ALL MY WEED!!!!” grabbing Etan and his luggage he screamed “WE GOT TO GO BACK AND GET IT, I ain’t going anywhere without my weed!!!” quietening down towards the end as he realised there were people around.

“You can’t go back your uncle will kill you!” Etan responded grabbing Bob by his shirt and dragging him through to the flight desk. While Bob fought desperately Etan was hardly even trying, dragging him along the ground like a child.

 “Ok where do you want to go?” the lady asked cheerfully at the front desk.

“What’s your earliest flight?” Etan asked quickly hurry in every aspect of his voice.

 “Our earliest flight is to America *P.E Setting* at 11:30” She replies

“Perfect” Etan replied “don’t you have some mates that live around there?”

“Yeah” Bob answered in a better mood

After getting the ticket he said his goodbyes to Etan, then headed off to America thinking “they better have some good WEED over there or I’d rather take my chances here”

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Touching down he gave Saul a call as soon as he was off the plane.

“Hello *cough* *cough*” a husky voice returned over the phone. “*who’s that?*” another in the background asked.

“Hello, Saul its Bob, from Jamaica remember… you, me and Red man!?”

“Boooobbb” Saul replied in his usual spaced out tone. “Fucking cocksicle. Bob man what the hell are you doing calling me? Is this a prank?”

“I’m here in *P.E setting*, I’m at the airport now!”

“Holly purple headed warrior, me and Dale will be there to pick you up soon hold on” Saul replied. Then left with Dale immediately

After waiting for 10 minutes Saul and Dale arrived to pick up Bob, it was apparent that they were both super high. After getting the greetings out of the way he got in the car and they started driving.

“So what brings you to our little slice of heaven?” Dale asked

“Well my father’s dead and my uncles trying to murder me, so… yeah” Bob retorted

Saul and Dale looked at each other as if to say “what the fuck am I supposed to say to this man?”

Before the others could speak Bob said “what I need right now is some top quality weed”

Saul and Dale looked at each other and smiled “that my man” Saul said “is one thing we know how to do!” pulling out a cross joint Dale began to light it up.

“What’s in that?” Bob asked

“Pineapple express my man *cough* the rarest weed *cough* known to man” Saul answered while Dale coughed the last bit of the smoke out.

It came around and now it was Bob’s turn, all he was thinking was “damn guess I don’t have to worry about going back to Jamaica for the weed”

Stalker Lily final copy

“Come on guys let’s head to McLarens and have a beer instead of sitting in a lame coffee house, it’s so not cool” Barney says in an annoyed voice.

“Barney its 10 in the morning”

“Oh yeah I am still drunk from last night Oh man I had the most amazing night there was a blonde a brunette and a hose pipe…”

“Ok Barney No one wants to hear about another one of your disgusting escapades. Wait. Did you say a hose pipe? No never mind I don’t even want to know. What I do want to know is that, why did the hot barista write her number on Marshalls cup? Ooh I think someone likes you Marshall” Ted says as he gives Marshall a dirty smirk.

Marshall smiles from ear to ear “Really you think she’s interested? Maybe I should go...”

“Well obviously she thought that was my coffee” Barney interrupts and snatches Marshall’s coffee cup trying to save the number into he’s phone.

Ted snatches the coffee cup away from Barney. “Barney that number was clearly for Marshall. You should ask her out Marshall.”

“You know what I’m going to do it. Yeah I mean it has been 6 months since Lily and I broke up.”

Marshall heads towards the counter and asks her out on a date. She replies with a quick Yes.

“OK great I will see you tomorrow at 7 pm”.

 “Well she said yes we are going out tomorrow”.

 “That’s great buddy I am so proud of you” Ted says and pats Marshall on the back.

The following day Lily visits  Marshall and Ted’s apartment to invite them for drinks at her apartment.

“Hey Ted you think I should invite Marshall?”

“Um yeah I don’t think he can make it tonight anyways he’s going on a date tonight”

“Oh ok” Lily replies with disappointment.

“Are you ok with that Lily?” Robin asks sympathetically while stroking her back.

“Oh yeah of course why wouldn’t I be? I mean he has to move on eventually.”

“OK girls I am off to work I will see you tonight right Lily?”

“Um actually I forgot the drinks have to be tomorrow night I have to do something tonight”.

“Oh ok I’ll see you tomorrow night then”.  Ted gives Lily a hug and heads off to work.

“Oh my god Robin! Marshall is going on a date? That’s horrible!”

“What? I thought you said you were ok with it?”

“Well yeah of course I had to say that in front of Ted! Who is she? And is she hotter than me?”

“I have no idea who she is all I know is that her name is Laura and she works at Starbucks on 5^th Avenue.”

Lily grabs her coat and heads towards the door.

Oh God I should not have told you that. Are you going to kill her? Lily think about your future...”

“What no are u crazy I am just going to check he if she’s hotter than me and who’s this Laura bitch. Jesus Robin you have a wild imagination”.

Robin laughs nervously “I was just joking. So in other words you’re going to stalk your ex-boyfriend’s date?”

“Yeah I guess you could call it that. Ok I am off I’ll see you later.”

Two hours later, while Marshall gets ready for he’s date he receives a disturbing phone call.

“At the hospital!?” Marshall says on the phone.

“Oh no Lily what did you do?” Robin says under her breath.

Marshall gets off the phone. “Oh my god Lily is in hospital, she met in an accident! We have to go now!”

Marshall, Robin Ted and Barney drops whatever they were doing and rushes to the hospital.

As they arrive at the hospital they notice Laura sitting in the waiting room.

Marshall runs to the doctor “Is Lily ok?” Marshall asks in a shaky voice.

The doctor lays he’s hands on Marshalls shoulder “Lily is going to be fine she just has a slight concussion. A horse trampled her while she was crossing the road. She just needs some rest.”

Marshall turns around to Laura. “Hey Laura sorry what are you doing here?”

“Well I was on the way to meet you and I felt some one following me that person had a massive coat over their head and they kept shouting out my name in a deep voice and when I turned around to look back she got trampled by a horse so I rushed over and she was unconscious so I rang the ambulance. They said that you were listed as one of the emergency contact then I realised that she was your ex.” Laura says in a worried voice.

“Um yeah she is I just don’t understand why she was following you.”

“Uh I actually I do.” Robin says softly. After Ted told Lily that you were going out on a date she got really upset and wanted to see who Laura was.”

As Robin says that, the doctor advises Marshall that Lily has woke up and so Marshall rushes in to see her.

“Oh my god Lily you are crazy” Marshall says. Marshall begins to break down as he sees Lily laying on the hospital bed with cuts and bruises on her face.”

“I know I am sorry I don’t know what I was thinking I just wanted...”

“ Lily I love you so much I don’t know what I would do if anything had happened to you…seeing you lying in this hospital bed made me realise I don’t want to spend another day without you.”

Marshall and Lily hugs. Just then all the friends walks into the ward and smiles at them because they all know how much Lily and Marshall love each other so much.

“Laura I am sorry I don’t think we can go on that date anymore”.

“Yeah, no I understand.”

kevin's final fanfic

The fanfic is orginally from Japanese Manga "Hunter X Hunter".

They (K and G) chase the Ryodan (gathering of thieves) to get a reward of 1 million dollars which is being offered for the capture of them. However, they were caught and now in danger because of their senseless pursuit.  C and L (friends of G and K) conduct hostage rescue operations.  The operation was planned already before chasing Ryodan. So K knows that friends would come and rescue, however Kira and Gon have to keep in mind that there is a person (Parknoda) with supernatural power who can read people’s minds.  It’s a power where desired information can be extracted simply through physical contact. Even if they do not have the intention of exposing it, she can extract it at her own will. So if this were to leak out, they will lose all chances of rescue and die.

“I am very sorry. We will not chase you anymore, so please forgive us” G said.

“Yeah, we will give up our attempt to get reward” K agreed.

Ryodan have been irritated last decade by all chasers.

“Hmm, what should we do, boss? Can I kill them all?” One of Ryodan member who has long hair asks to Boss.

“Capture them. They probably have some connections to the other chaser. They might be of use alive, so we can bring them to parknoda and we will see how many chasers are there and where they are” His voice trembled with rage. Ryodan’s boss is the man who is irritated by chaser.

“I will call her right now, boss” He responds.

“Tell her that we will wait at the Benjamin Hotel” boss says.
“All right, let’s go everybody" 

They hurry into a car and drive ahead to Benjamin Hotel where they see Parknoda and other Ryodan members.

“G, don’t worry too much. We would be rescued by our friends” K whispered

“Hmm, by the way, how did you know that Ryodan members would meet in Benjamin Hotel?” G whispered.

“Didn’t I tell you? We have already done our research on Ryodan” K responds with confidence.

(At Hotel)

“They are not here yet” One of Ryodan member says.

“Wait right here. We will catch up them here at the lobby. Keep an eye on them” Boss sat at chair and closed his eyes.

“Yes” they replied.

K feels a little insecure about their plan. He hopes that their members are already here, and give them any signal.

(5mins later)

“Idiot, it’s not Bensermin! It's Benjamin Hotel! How could you have heard it wrong?! You are always like this” A stranger shouted loud. It was L. L shouted with an extra ordinarily loud voice.

 “What are you looking at? Huh? Do you want to pick a fight?” L looks back at Ryodan and shouted.

 “Boss, should we chase him out?” one of ryodan member also shouted and tries to draw his knife.

 “Ignore him, keep watching”

 “I am taking to this idiot. This is all due to your leak of responsibility. I will only close my eyes this once. If it fails, do you know what will happen?” Listen carefully, 7 o'clock sharp! Come to this hotel by then. I will fire you if you are one second late! Okay?” L shouted with a loud voice and sit back to his chair.

(Hmm, close my eyes, 7o'clock sharp. It’s a message) G was able to deduce the message from what L said.

(We have to escape from these two guys which will take about 2~3seconds. If there's a sudden black out, it will take at least a few seconds to get used to the dark.) K thought and planed everything in his mind.

“Damn, let’s listen to radio to kill time” He muttered himself.

This is the last song. Here’s the song Moon Child. (Radio voice)

(Classical Music~~)

G and K keep eyes on clock and listen to radio.

Just at that moment, Parknoda and 2 people came in through Main door

“Hey! Parknoda and rest are here” one of ryodan member welcomed her.

 “Hey guys, wow, Ryo 1 you look so tired” she laugh at his tired face.

 “I couldn’t sleep last night. I just had 2 hours of short sleep.” he had a haggard, worn appearance.

G thought it is a good chance to close his eyes and prepare for blackout. G said, “I also did not sleep last night which means I am really tired right now. Can I have a nap?”

“Are you kidding? Or want to die right now. So you can take your last sleep” One of ryodan member says with a quivering voice. He felt resentment against G.

“Fine, I will just close my eyes” he replied in a small voice.

 Boss realized that he needs to know their hiding place. He speaks, “that aside, Parknoda, check those two”

 “Okay, what do you want to ask?” Parknoda smiles

 “Ask them, where is other chaser”

G and K looked up the clock and time was 6:55.

(Radio voice): Moon child is over. Our programme has only one minute left.

 “1 minute! I have to draw out the time” he groaned inwardly.

“It’s no use. As long as you make contact with the opponent, we have nothing to hide, we don’t know anything either even if we do know something...” G closed his eyes and said to Parknoda

 “I will know from one touch. So please shut up” Parknoda grabs his neck and tries to extract.

 “Even if we do know something, we will mix it with random memories to be extracted by you” K also closed his eyes and said with confidence.

 “You are mistaken. The memories that I extract are the ones that are most pure, the original memories. I will not extract the fake images that you two invent. My questions will trigger your memories and I am able to get memories that have not been tampered” Parknoda smiles and grabs their neck stronger.

(Radio voice): the time is now exactly 7o'clock

When it is 7o’clock on time, all the lights went out. All of Ryodan member were taken aback by the sudden blackout. Of course they are not able to see anything, while G and K secure a clear view when they open their eyes.

“We can see! But those guys can’t see yet” G and K shook of their hand off violently and jumped over to other side.

“The kid on the right escaped, but can’t see anything” One ryondan member who was in the right side of G yelled out to other members. “Were they waiting for this chance?”

“I can’t let go the one on the left” another ryodan member tried to grab K’s shoos, but K jumped and takes off his shoes.

“Damn, I missed him” he throws out K’s shoos.

 “Run K! Let’s get out of here” G yelled out to K in front of the main door.

“Calm down. Guys, anyone who can see try to block the entrance” he called with a loud voice.

G and K escaped really fast through the entrance. They run really fast and already knew closest way to get out of Hotel. Ryodan members missed K and G. Few minutes later, lights turned on.

“Well, it was a pretty good plan, looks like the original plan for the hostages. We missed them” boss speaks in rough voice.

“Was the electricity off all over the town or just in this building?” one of ryodan members asks to boss.

“I think they cut the power supply of this building, it was planned out well” boss replies

“Damn it. Boss let’s just give up with chasers and go back to hiding place. I really need to go for sleep” he shows an unsatisfied look to boss.

 “We missed them because of your drowse” another ryodan member yells to him.

 “Shut up” he yells out too.

 “Listen guys; I guess they are most likely moving by car, we can still catch up them with the traffic jam. It’s rush hour now. Parknoda, did you get anything from them?” boss tries to act calm. He thinks that parknoda did get some information from K and G.

“I extracted a few memories from them. I know where their hiding places are” she smiles.

“Ok. Let’s go and kill them all”

G and K run out from the Hotel and arrived at subway station.

“Why did not we use car? There was a prepared car for us in front of Hotel” G asked reason to K.

“It is evening rush hour now, using a bullet train would be faster. I guess Parknoda extracted our memories, which mean they know where our hiding place is.  Let’s catch up with L and c and get out of this country. Ryodan, they are dangerous. I really don’t want to chase them again” He shivered.

“Let’s chase another thief”

complete fanfic by Lois. 28/03/2012

This Fanfict was from a Japanese Manga: The Record of the Fallen Vampire （バンパイア十字界）December 22, 2003 was published.

The Record of a Fallen Vampire

Prologue: 300 years ago

As the battle rages between the Vampire King and the Black Swan, as the two powerful being clash and thunder roars and destruction surrounds between the two, as their power wanes, their battle has finally reaches its end.

The Vampire King Akabara Strauss lit: Red Rose has finally fallen in Battle. And as the battle field became quiet as the King sat on the floor saving his last breath he said a few words to the black Swan saying: “I am sorry for all the things had happened for these past 1000 years I had no ill intention,but it was for the sake for his people and peace for the Vampire race and the human race”.

He also said to her:" you are free from this curse that continued for the past 1000 years, live on and have a happy life, and again I’m sorry."

As the girl approached the dying King and sat with him she gave him a smile and said to him “May you have the blessings of the moon my King” as he remembered the words that was said to him a thousand years ago, tears fallen from him from the happiness and sadness that he had experienced during his long reign, he smiled and closed his eyes and said I tried my best.

And on his last breath he died showing a smile on his face and finally broke free from his long 1000 years curse and also freeing the Black Swans curse.

300 years later

300 years since the last battle occurred as the pure-blood vampire erased from existence the dhamphirs (half-human and half-vampire) and the human have finally obtain peace. As the humans that had experienced the sufferings from war had finally passed on and new generations emerged.

As for the dhamphires they had grown in age but slowly aging, the race had increase in numbers, and new politics formed and new technology rapidly evolving.

The dhamphires have finally moved on to the plan that was set 300 years by their King Akabara Strauss. They moved to the new kingdom of the monarchy not in earth but the colonized moon itself that took 300 years to complete.

New leaders are formed for the Dhamphire empire and their leader Bridget Irving Frostheart the adopted daughter of Akabara Strauss since she was a child, as she’s the master of war strategies and politics a fitting role to rule the Empire.

But for Bridget she doesn’t want to rule the Kingdom as she thinks she’s not worthy of being a leader. As she yearns for her beloved father she misses him and cries every night talking to her sleep “My dear father please come back to me I miss you so much”.

As she walks down the hall of her beloved fathers castle as she entered an empty room there she stood there staring the painting of her King, then tears began to fall from her eyes again. But over by the door a figure of a girl appeared. And it was Lety another adopted daughter of Akabara Strauss although she still young compared to Bridget, but she was taught in the art of combat by the King, thus she became one of Bridget’s generals in an early age.

As Lety began to speak to her:

“How long are you going to be like this dear sister? Was losing him took your happiness away?”

She yelled at her:

“Snap out of it!” then slaps her “Would he be happy if he sees you like this?”

As Bridget eyes began to widen and starts to remember the time when she was with him and how he taught her on how to become a leader, and how to master politics and also how to become a master in war. But one thing she remembered of what he said to her

“Bridget once your old enough and understand the things I taught to you and when am gone I want you to take over my place and lead the people”

She smiled, and said to herself “how could I have forgotten the promise I made to him…how stupid of me.”

“Back to your senses?”Lety asked

“No need to lecture me my dear little sister” Bridget replied.

As they laughed, then turned around and looked at the painting one last time and both said:

“Father thank you for everything you have done to us to me and my little sister this is goodbye for now as we have a country to lead and protect. We will come back to see you again.”

Then the two left from the room and walked towards the meeting hall. Then suddenly they saw an image of their father relaying one last message to them and said:

“May you girls have the blessings from the moon on your long reign...."

Then the image disappeared like mist, with a smile they continue on.

The End.

Fanfiction Reviews

Moment Like This

I am at heart a Gleek and felt that this fanfic did justice to the TV show. While it is cliche and seems like an everyday Finn and Rachel scenario it also adds realism to the fanfic and makes the scenarios described seem like they could possibly brought to life in the show. This fanfic described the loving and passionate extent of the "Finchel" relationship and despite the many obstacles they may encounter they will always love each other no matter what. It talks about how Rachel is covered in blue slushy because of the bullying that occurs at McKinley, due to the fit that she is in the Glee club and is considered an outsider because of this. Finn is their to aid her and are for her while faces the difficulties of being a social outcast. He assure her that he will always be here for her no matter what.

While i enjoyed reading this it though that some of the language use in they fanfic might not have been the most suitable for certain characters. For example Finn swearing is not realistic because while the show is rated PG it is also not in Finns character to swear . He is a calm,gentle and compassionate character and has the ability to get angry however I personally could not see the writers introducing swearing into his dialogue because it goes against his nature and how they have portrayed hi from the beginning. So i felt the writer should have thought about the language and how the character may react to certain situations before including the swearing into the fanfic.

The Ugly Truth

I generally enjoy revenge as a TV show because I believe the plot, setting, characters and dialogue of the show is well thought out and expressed. When I read this I remembered that I myself remember  thinking about this possibility of Charlotte being the love child child between Victoria Grayson and David Clarke. In this fan fiction the writer has produced a full dialogue of conversation between Victoria and Charlotte . She explains to Charlotte that the video that was exposed at the fundraiser was personal and a complete mistake. Charlotte confronts her mother about why she mentioned to her therapist that she wishes Charlotte was never born. Victoria uses the fact that she doesn't want Charlotte to know about her illicit affair with David Clarke to cover herself . She accuses David of rape and explains to Charlotte that that was the reason that she said she wishes Charlotte was never born.

If you find Revenge as interesting as I do and would dare to watch ahead then you would find that a scenario similar to this one does actually occur. When Conrad and Victoria decide that it would be beneficial to split after all the drama in the family . However the scenario thats occurs in the TV show involves Victoria explaining to Daniel that she was supposedly raped by David Clarke. I thought thus fan fiction was very interesting. Not only because I love Revenge as a TV show but because it was realistic and does show that the writer understands the character and the plot of the TV show well enough to create duplicate scenarios that could be realistic to some extent.

Kiss

In this fanfic the writer talks about the characters of Wizards of Waverly place.

I didn’t think this fanfic was well written or interesting at all. It wasn’t until the end that I realized it was a complete waste of time reading it. Personally I am not one to ridicule work and make people feel bad about what they have written but I thought that the ideas expressed I the fanfic were inappropriate and silly.

The fanfic described the relationship between Alex and Justin. It is a Valentines Day episode centralized around Justin’s break up with Juliet. He decided to set a “kissogram” in attempts to get over Juliet. Alex visits him at his “kissogram” and demands a kiss from him. He doesn’t realize that she does not mean I literal kiss but a chocolate kiss that he is giving out as a valentine present to all the girls who pay to kiss him at the “kissogram”. Finally the end of the fanfic reveals to the reader that Alex was after the candy Justin was giving out instead of the actual kiss he thought she wanted.

I did not enjoy this, as I don’t think that the relationship between the brother and sister duo was written to sound innocent. However I thought the idea of having Alex ask for a kiss with the intention of wanting just chocolate was clever.

The Girlfriend Agreement

The Big Bang Theory is a smart and creative comedy that makes viewer think about the humor that is being communicated across. I thoroughly enjoyed this fan fiction and think that the writer must know the show really well to create a fan fiction like this. When I read this I could imagine each one of their character saying their respective lines and in the scenario described by the writer. Including some drama into the show was clever because it shows how diverse the show can be. Even with a drama such as a death or serious illness would usually clash with a comedy however I think that this was written well enough for it to fit in perfectly.

However, I believe that there is one more thing the writer could have improved on- I think that the way they have written the fan fiction was a bit odd. The structure was not what I was expecting and I felt like the ideas moved around too fast. The scenario of Sheldon being completely obsolete to everyone’s feelings apart from his own was clever and humorous. I’m not going to lie, if this writer wrote again. I would read.

Distant

Ahh. Desperate Housewives. I remember watching this when it first came out. I wasn’t “supposed” watch it because it was “AO” and I was too young apparently. HAHA. This show has taught me a lot about life would you believe. And reading this fan fiction brought back a HUGE amount of memories. This fan fiction talked about Bree and her afilction with the new neighbors. If you have watched Desperate Housewives you would know that later on in the series we discover Bree did know the new neighbors and the wife was connected to Mary-Alice. Desperate Housewives was a huge series and could not explained in a few words. You would need to know the storyline to understand.

I enjoyed this dialogue in this fan fiction and is the only primarily sourced dialogue fan fiction that I have read. I think that the writer did and average job of this and probably should have added in a brief setting description along with conjunctive sentences to tie the whole scene together. Like I said at the begining I love Desperate Housewives and thought that this fan fiction was good but could have been improved had it had a little more detail and descriptive language instead of sole dialogue.